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Dream page 12

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Filling in the gaps in my manga. Had to re-draw some things.

Read from right to left, Japanese style. Don't like it? Too bad! :nuu:

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Another technical note: In the two first panels it would help to create a sense of a conversation or dialogue if you could see the other character in the background. In the first panel you could do that easily, but you'd have to change the second so that the angle of view is from behind the guy. Now the second panel is just viewing his crotch... which is sort of comical. It makes it seem that it's more important than the dudes face(the frame doesn't have any other point of interest, so that's why).

I like the story so far, pretty standard start but it leaves a nice chance to expand.